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Rules are simple-

  • Write a story, complete in itself.
  • Check spelling, grammar, and punctuation.
  • Copy and paste your Story URL to the inLinkz list.
  • The story should be up to 250 words.
  • Add this line < #TellTaleThursday with Anshu & Priya > at the end of the post.
  • Read, comment and share – spread the love.

Write a story with this creative prompt. Your protagonist heard a rasping knock at the door at 1 am. The story can be funny, scary, dramatic! Anything that showcases your writing skills. And most importantly, Have fun!



 
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Warning: This story has a paranormal plot. Reader’s discretion is advised.

The Three Mistakes

 

Hearing a rasping sound on my door, I left my warm blanket and checked the time. It was 1 A.M.

Who could it be? Peering through the spy-hole, I saw a silhouette. I should have been scared but my soporific brain couldn’t process and I opened the door which was my first mistake of that fateful night.

When I opened the door, I did not see anyone. I wondered if I was dreaming or my brain was playing games with me. “Come in”, I said sarcastically. It was my second mistake of the night. 

Closing the door, I went to the kitchen to drink water. My throat was parched. I filled the glass with water. I noticed the water in the glass slowly turned red. I opened my mouth to scream, but no sound came out of my mouth. Have I gone dumb? I dropped the glass. Did I hear the sound of the shattering glass? Am I deaf, now? And that’s when I made my last mistake, I turned around. I saw a shadow behind me, holding my glass.

I don’t remember what happened after that. When I woke up, I was holding a glass in my hand, with red liquid. The shadow next to me whispered “You were thirsty. Bottoms up, your welcome drink. Cheers!”

22 Comments

  1. Super stuff Priya. I liked the way you have used first mistake, second mistake. It builds up suspense and fear in the reader’s mind. What happened in the end.. Has the protagonist crossed to the other side?

  2. writenlive says:

    I liked the way the story built up, the spookiness getting better and better 😀
    And oh, the shadow talks! I think you can easy create a sequel to this one.

  3. Abhijit Ray says:

    Creepy and uncanny. Full of hints of what could happen. Nice.

  4. Anagha Yatin says:

    Gripping ghostly tale Priya. Good one.

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  6. Shilpa Nairy says:

    Spooky!! Happy to see the person alive.

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  8. geekanika says:

    Hmm interesting. What is it exactly that makes vampires so scary? Is it the change we fear? Is being assimilated in to the culture of our attackers the worst thing that could happen? As an individual, may be not.
    It is certainly the most frightening thing for a community because then people start turning against their own.
    Superb story Priya. Sorry for the long rant. Just thinking out loud.

    • Priya says:

      Thank you, Kanika. Vampire is a possibility. I will be writing a sequel for this. Hope you will like the explanation.
      Vampire is a perfect combination of glamour and spooky.

  9. 1. I liked the narration. Kept me hooked.
    2. I liked the twist at the end. Perfect horror story.
    3. It spooked me.

  10. Priya says:

    Absolutely, Sona. There is going to be a sequel. Had to be spooky with that prompt.

  11. Priya says:

    Thank you for giving your 3 points to the three mistakes, Rohan.
    It was supposed to spook the readers so i am glad it worked.

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