A Mirage
The Treasure Hunt
September 17, 2018Reviewing Book ' Tara'- by Anshu
September 25, 2018
He sat under the colorful umbrellas in Miracle Garden, an oasis in the desert city of Dubai.
As she entered, he checked the ring in his pocket. Looking at her admiringly, he thought “she is prettier than the prettiest flower here”.
She walked to him and announced, “I am moving to NewYork, you too move on.” She confessed that her affection was more of her need when she was alone in Dubai. Now that she was moving, she was done with him.
Taking the ring out of his pocket, he wondered how he mistook a mirage for an oasis.
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60 Comments
Nice last line – I’m pleased he discovered this before it became more complicated!
True. Thanks so much for reading and commenting, Iain.
Crisply written. Very beautiful.
Sometimes emotions dupe us and mock at our beliefs.
Thanks Jaya for reading and commenting 😊
Brutal!
Thanks, Martin
The plain, direct prose that you’ve chosen to use enhances the brutal nature of the way she dumps him. And that’s a lovely last line!
Thanks so much, Penny. It was brutal.. ‘the convenient love.’
I think this type of things happen way too often… If this was a romantic comedy he will be sent to New York and meet her in Central Park by accident, and they won’t need the ring to bond.
I have a feeling that he would find someone in the Miracle Garden
Dear Priya,
How sad for him. Dandy last line.
Shalom,
Rochelle
It saved him heartache of years, I guess. Thanks so much, Rochelle.😊
Very emotive piece.
Thanks so much
If that’s a Dubai romance, I’d pass. Poor guy.
Thanks for reading
Ouch! At least he found out before making a fool of himself… to her anyway.
True! It’s crazy though how he missed all the redflags
He was not alone. Very few have ever understood what girls is thinking. Cruel woman.
Thanks for reading and commenting, Abhijit
Loved the last line, Priya! The world is full of people who take your advantage, but glad he discovered the truth before things got pretty messy.
So true. He learnt his lesson the hard way. Thanks Anshu
He’d clearly been missing the signs. It was never meant to be.
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True. He did miss the signs.. he was too much in love.
Nice ending! Happy he discovered soon.
Thanks so much for reading, Shilpa.
Simple and neat.
The setting is perfect!
Thanks so much
I hope that he can get a refund on the ring
Haha.. thank you for reading and commenting 😊
Your last line said it all, and wrapped up the story beautifully! Good one!
Thank you for reading, Mayuri
Neatly told story with a realistic theme – and the last line is a little gem.
It happens all the time. Doesn’t it. Thanks so much for the lovely comment, Jilly.
I loved the setting of the story….just for a break up
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Oh dear, that’s what happens when the initial illusion of love is formed on shifting sand dunes. Perhaps next time.
True. may be next time he will be lucky in love.
How can love be so selfish? But thank God he got to know the reality before it got too late.
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Love isn’t selfish. Just her idea of love was.. maybe she didn’t understand and value when she had. One day she will realize it.
One wonders if she was too shallow to understand the depths of his feelings, or if she did know and felt that a fast, complete break would be easier for him in the long run.
That’s a very positive approach.
She didn’t understand his feelings .. one day she will realize.
Thanks, Linda
Yours and mine start out with same premise but boy, does yours take a U-turn! He should probably consider himself lucky to have escaped the clutches of someone so superficial.
True. I have a feeling that one day she would realize but I’m afraid it will be too late. Thanks for stopping by.
Just too damned hard when we let our hearts see through our eyes instead of the brain.
So true. Thanks for the wise words. 😊
It appears he dodged a bullet here. Hopefully, this next choice will be a better match. Nice take on the prompt.
He definitely did Dodge a bullet.
Thanks Jo.
Throwing a hammer on the heart kind of a story. I can imagine how that guy would have prepared for the proposal but it is over. Nicely written.
Thanks so much, Paresh
Better earlier than later I guess!
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A discovery exactly on time!
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Wonderful last line!
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