A Mirage

The Treasure Hunt
September 17, 2018
Reviewing Book ' Tara'- by Anshu
September 25, 2018

 
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He sat under the colorful umbrellas in Miracle Garden, an oasis in the desert city of Dubai.

As she entered, he checked the ring in his pocket. Looking at her admiringly, he thought “she is prettier than the prettiest flower here”.

She walked to him and announced, “I am moving to NewYork, you too move on.” She confessed that her affection was more of her need when she was alone in Dubai. Now that she was moving, she was done with him.

Taking the ring out of his pocket, he wondered how he mistook a mirage for an oasis.


pic courtesy: Dale Rogerson
Written for: Friday Fictioneers


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60 Comments

  1. Iain Kelly says:

    Nice last line – I’m pleased he discovered this before it became more complicated!

  2. Crisply written. Very beautiful.
    Sometimes emotions dupe us and mock at our beliefs.

  3. Martin Cororan says:

    Brutal!

  4. pennygadd51 says:

    The plain, direct prose that you’ve chosen to use enhances the brutal nature of the way she dumps him. And that’s a lovely last line!

  5. I think this type of things happen way too often… If this was a romantic comedy he will be sent to New York and meet her in Central Park by accident, and they won’t need the ring to bond.

  6. Dear Priya,
    How sad for him. Dandy last line.
    Shalom,
    Rochelle

  7. Alice Audrey says:

    If that’s a Dubai romance, I’d pass. Poor guy.

  8. Dale says:

    Ouch! At least he found out before making a fool of himself… to her anyway.

  9. Abhijit Ray says:

    He was not alone. Very few have ever understood what girls is thinking. Cruel woman.

  10. Loved the last line, Priya! The world is full of people who take your advantage, but glad he discovered the truth before things got pretty messy.

  11. He’d clearly been missing the signs. It was never meant to be.
    Click to read my FriFic tale!

  12. Shilpa Nairy says:

    Nice ending! Happy he discovered soon.

  13. Simple and neat.
    The setting is perfect!

  14. michael1148humphris says:

    I hope that he can get a refund on the ring

  15. Your last line said it all, and wrapped up the story beautifully! Good one!

  16. jillyfunnell says:

    Neatly told story with a realistic theme – and the last line is a little gem.

  17. I loved the setting of the story….just for a break up

  18. James McEwan says:

    Oh dear, that’s what happens when the initial illusion of love is formed on shifting sand dunes. Perhaps next time.

  19. alpanadeo says:

    How can love be so selfish? But thank God he got to know the reality before it got too late.
    #MothersGurukulreads #Myfrienalexa

  20. granonine says:

    One wonders if she was too shallow to understand the depths of his feelings, or if she did know and felt that a fast, complete break would be easier for him in the long run.

  21. 4963andypop says:

    Yours and mine start out with same premise but boy, does yours take a U-turn! He should probably consider himself lucky to have escaped the clutches of someone so superficial.

  22. StuHN says:

    Just too damned hard when we let our hearts see through our eyes instead of the brain.

  23. It appears he dodged a bullet here. Hopefully, this next choice will be a better match. Nice take on the prompt.

  24. Throwing a hammer on the heart kind of a story. I can imagine how that guy would have prepared for the proposal but it is over. Nicely written.

  25. Dahlia says:

    Better earlier than later I guess!

  26. Lavanya says:

    A discovery exactly on time!

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