The Clue

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A month ago, my husband went missing. I kept asking everyone if they had seen him. I asked everyone for the help. They didn’t help me. I didn’t blame them. They didn’t know how to help, where to look. But it hurt me when they shut the doors on my face.

He had been there in front of their eyes, all along. Like the invisible gorilla, he had been there, all this while. Nobody checked the car in the abandoned park, it had been there forever
Who would have thought? I killed him with a wrench, in the park.


PHOTO PROMPT © Ted Strutz
Written for Friday Fictioneer

43 Comments

  1. michael1148humphris says:

    An interesting use of an abandoned car, I enjoyed the journey

  2. Abhijit Ray says:

    So you killed your husband? Nice twist at the end. Good story.

  3. Iain Kelly says:

    Nice way to cover it up, by pretending to want their help. Nice one!

  4. Violet Lentz says:

    My first thought was maybe he wasn’t as dead as you thought he was.. But then, you might have transported him there yourself….. but that’s a whole other story in itself isn’t it?

  5. Sandra says:

    I sense she was becoming impatient for the crime to be discovered so that she could move on.

  6. trentpmcd says:

    The perfect crime. Nicely done.

  7. Dear Priya,
    I should think she wouldn’t want to be found out. I guess the tension has gotten to her. Nicely done.
    Shalom,
    Rochelle

  8. Dale says:

    Great way to cover her tracks!

  9. Frankie Perussault says:

    ouch! another of these spouse killers… help!!!!

  10. 4963andypop says:

    I had to look up invisible gorilla: its been a long time since I took psych. Seems like she is definitely trying to play the part of the distraught and grieving wife, to fool the authorities. Guess no one goes to the park anymore!

  11. granonine says:

    “Please help me find my husband!” What an excellent ploy! That car, though, is going to be smelling quite awful. I hope it’s far away from any houses 🙂

  12. pennygadd51 says:

    You have identified the key things that you want to communicate in your story, and you have written them with emphasis. The twist at the end works well.

  13. kislaya says:

    Evil!! The ending was so unexpected… pretending to be innocent she hides her real intention – the husband killer

  14. draliman says:

    Kill him and then ask for help finding him. Nice bit of misdirection on her part!

  15. Kalpana Solsi says:

    oMG! A totally different end to the story.
    https://ideasolsi65.blogspot.com/2019/01/a-car-named-desire.html

  16. James McEwan says:

    Not sure if I would want to help either, if you’re carrying a wrench in your purse.
    What had the poor man done?

  17. Nasty and brilliantly inventive, love this one

  18. Creating a smoke screen. Lovely story. Well done
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  19. subroto says:

    Ha! Ha! That’s some wicked black humour in there. Looks like she really wanted to be found out. Nice one.
    FYI I did see the gorilla and counted the right number of passes 🙂

  20. Devilishly clever woman, misdirecting the community and she got away with it. Well-written story, Priay.

  21. It looks as if she wanted people to find out the body or the crime. She had killed but she still couldn’t move on. Good one, Priya!

  22. tedstrutz says:

    Okay, Miss Scarlett. Or is it Miss Pink?

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