The Clue
17th Jan 2019 #TellTaleThursday
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January 23, 2019
A month ago, my husband went missing. I kept asking everyone if they had seen him. I asked everyone for the help. They didn’t help me. I didn’t blame them. They didn’t know how to help, where to look. But it hurt me when they shut the doors on my face.
He had been there in front of their eyes, all along. Like the invisible gorilla, he had been there, all this while. Nobody checked the car in the abandoned park, it had been there forever
Who would have thought? I killed him with a wrench, in the park.
PHOTO PROMPT © Ted Strutz
Written for Friday Fictioneer
43 Comments
An interesting use of an abandoned car, I enjoyed the journey
Thank you so much. I am glad you liked it
So you killed your husband? Nice twist at the end. Good story.
Yes. Your comment made me realise it wasn’t clear.. fixed it.thanks so much, Abhijit
Nice way to cover it up, by pretending to want their help. Nice one!
I am not sure for how long she can keep it covered, though.
Thank you, Iain
My first thought was maybe he wasn’t as dead as you thought he was.. But then, you might have transported him there yourself….. but that’s a whole other story in itself isn’t it?
Oo.. you are good. I like your version.
Thank you, Violet, for reading and commenting.
I sense she was becoming impatient for the crime to be discovered so that she could move on.
Hmm.. that’s one way to look at it. Thank you, Sandra
The perfect crime. Nicely done.
Thank you
Dear Priya,
I should think she wouldn’t want to be found out. I guess the tension has gotten to her. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
She was just misleading everyone, Rochelle. Thank you for the fun prompt. My laptop giving me hard time. Bit late in catching up.
Great way to cover her tracks!
Thank you, Dale
ouch! another of these spouse killers… help!!!!
Hahaha..
I had to look up invisible gorilla: its been a long time since I took psych. Seems like she is definitely trying to play the part of the distraught and grieving wife, to fool the authorities. Guess no one goes to the park anymore!
She did.. and succeeded too. He park is abandoned and she hopes it stays that way. Thank you so much
“Please help me find my husband!” What an excellent ploy! That car, though, is going to be smelling quite awful. I hope it’s far away from any houses 🙂
You have identified the key things that you want to communicate in your story, and you have written them with emphasis. The twist at the end works well.
I am glad, it worked for u. Thank you, penny
Evil!! The ending was so unexpected… pretending to be innocent she hides her real intention – the husband killer
Yup, evil smart woman. Thank you
Kill him and then ask for help finding him. Nice bit of misdirection on her part!
True that. Thank you for reading and commenting
oMG! A totally different end to the story.
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Thank you, Kalpana
Not sure if I would want to help either, if you’re carrying a wrench in your purse.
What had the poor man done?
They didn’t know about the wrench though. Thanks, James.
I guess, he didn’t do anything except for marrying a psychopath.
Nasty and brilliantly inventive, love this one
I am glad. Thank you so much.
Creating a smoke screen. Lovely story. Well done
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Thank you so much, for reading and commenting. I am glad you found it lovely
Ha! Ha! That’s some wicked black humour in there. Looks like she really wanted to be found out. Nice one.
FYI I did see the gorilla and counted the right number of passes 🙂
Lol.. nice. I saw the gorilla..didn’t count correctly though
Devilishly clever woman, misdirecting the community and she got away with it. Well-written story, Priay.
Indeed, she is a clever woman. Thank you, Branda.
It looks as if she wanted people to find out the body or the crime. She had killed but she still couldn’t move on. Good one, Priya!
It was her way to cover up. I am glad you liked it. Thank you
Great suspense.
Okay, Miss Scarlett. Or is it Miss Pink?