The Last Words

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Sitting by the grave, alone, he philosophically asked: “Why do we die?”
He imagined her turning in her grave, twice, and took a drag. He felt she was still alive. How could she just leave, without saying a goodbye? She had to die, after what she had done.

The karma took the revenge, he thought. She was his partner in crime. Without her, he felt lonely, life wasn’t fun anymore.

“You never wanted me to smoke. Guess, what? This is my last cigarette,” holding the gun in the other hand, he spoke his last words.


This post is written for Friday Fictioneer hosted by Rochelle.

50 Comments

  1. Dear Priya,
    Sad story with a very sad ending. Nicely done.
    Shalom,
    Rochelle

  2. Abhijit Ray says:

    He will meet her on the other side, hopefully! Macabre!

  3. Rowena says:

    A desperate tale of grief here, Priya.
    Just a thought, of changing: “How can she just leave, without saying g a goodbye?” to “How could she just leave, without saying a goodbye?”
    I could definitely feel his raw grief in that line.
    Best wishes,
    Rowena

    • Priya says:

      Thank you, Rowna. Fixed.

      • Rowena says:

        That’s what we’re here for and whenever I write something longer or important, I always run it by someone else because we often see what we believe is on the page and can miss what is actually there. That’s one of the things about being a part of FF…we edit and critique each other and in a kind manner.
        Best wishes,
        Rowena

  4. This is a chilling tale… I started to wonder what “partners in crime” was… maybe it’s not fun any longer when you have to face what you have done with no one to share it with.

  5. granonine says:

    Well done. The ending is quite dramatic, and perfectly stated.

  6. A sad surprising ending. He didn’t wish to continue without his “partner in crime” and maybe karma applied to him as well?

  7. Oh no!
    Well done — that punch line, though !!!

  8. Yikes! The way he says his last words seems like revenge in itself. Nicely done.

  9. Dale says:

    I never do understand people like that. But they are out there!

  10. Chilling and bleak tale, hope he finds peace at last.

  11. Natasha says:

    Another dramatic ending. Another story well told

  12. StuHN says:

    A Bonnie and Clyde couple. Really liked this.

  13. subroto says:

    Leaves us wondering as to what she did. A well told story.

  14. Wow! What a shocker, a sad tale no less for the New Year in Waiting. Great drama

  15. Violet Lentz says:

    I know that “I’m going with you” feeling well.. Very nicely written.

  16. 4963andypop says:

    Not the prescription for quitting smoking that Most doctors would recommend!

  17. The grief in this is so strong it makes my eyes water.
    I will say that I don’t think you need the word philosophically in that first line. It doesn’t really add much and compared to how smooth the rest of the piece is, it just sounds a little clunky.
    Still a wonderful piece though.

  18. Partners in crime, partners in life and now in death! Good story, Priya

  19. lisarey1990 says:

    So sad. Definitely very emotive.

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